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Cloud dancers by ~Wothan:iconWothan:



We are cloud-dancers, writhing and pulsing to
Unheard tribal beats,
Intertwined, pushing hard against the ground and each other:
Pushing to leap out, to fly
Into the wild, glorious expanse, our minds dulled and sharpened.
Then to drop again into the downy white,
Dripping with star-sweat and blinded by the dance: Pupils wide.
Grinning hard, breathing harder,
Burrowing deep into the cloud to rest, souls weary from the exchange

Let me dance like this always.
©2007-2008 ~Wothan
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Read it and tell me what you think! tis probably one of my favs
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~Papillon-Raissa:iconPapillon-Raissa: Jan 13, 2007, 8:29:43 AM
I don't really know what to say about this one, except - wow! I love the first 2 lines - they really grab your attention and the imagery and metaphors throughout are just so strong - it would have been so easy to lose that but you haven't, and nor have you over-done it. The last line is such a subtle contrast but it really makes it feel human, and taking it back to the beginning really completes it. well done!